Tuesday, April 24, 2007

DAY 8: Driving/ Not Paying Attention

Well here ia an idea that came to me while driving. It is a new post though nothing to write hoem about. Day 8 down.




I want to tell him it's too late.
That steel plus neglect always equals
screwed to the power of slow decay.

But these are not things you say to someone suspended
fifty feet in the air,
working nights,
pissed off,
with a welder.

But he knows better than anyone
that once water slips like a lover
beneath the sheets of paint
that you either catch the symptoms
or begin the process of deconstruction.

But this overpass has been forgotten
patches of brown flakes
creep up the side like industrial ivy
and these men are asked to revive this city like
some secret garden.

But in the tending of
sparks and flakes
they are sowing
splinters of metal that move when you press them
even years after the restoration.

Their fathers planted
marigolds of sickness in their lungs
through years of
sucking in the pollen of their livelihood.

But some circumstances only allow so much growth.

So sons of blue color grow to
fill the same gaps in the latticework of
Baltimore that their fathers did.
Once this life slips like water into your lungs
You begin the slow drown of blue collar.

Each night as his wife winces
in the dark at the touch of his hands
from the roughness of his neglect,
he wishes that he could turn fingertips like
briars back into
thick mounds of tilled soil.

it's too late
but he already knows that.

2 comments:

Liz said...

I really like the second to last stanza and the end.

I think this has a lot of potential if you want to play around with it some more. I would expand more on the idea of them doing the same work their fathers did and maybe throw some images and examples of that in there; as it is right now, it's all just vague ideas of the kinds of things they're doing. Also maybe play more with the idea that this kind of work can make them sick as well as be a figurative hereditary sickness in itself.

jannacaroline said...

I agree with Liz. This draft has a lot of beautiful imagery and great potential to spread out into something greater, bigger and wholly Baltimore, hon.